Showing posts with label Cas Peace. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Cas Peace. Show all posts

Friday, November 28, 2014

The Challenge by Cas Peace


Friend against friend, lover against lover, ally against ally.
Conflict is coming …   Nine months have passed since Brynne Sullyan helped forge an alliance between the realms of Albia and Andaryon. A fragile peace reigns as both sides recover from the events of the previous year. Then mysterious raiders strike Andaryon villages. Attempts are made on the life of Albia’s High King. 
As Sullyan scrambles to find those responsible, unseen enemies threaten to pull apart everything she has worked for, including her marriage.
To betray either one would break her heart, but
if conflict is inevitable, she must make a choice …
The alliance begins to crumble, and Sullyan finds herself caught between two monarchs: the king she’s sworn allegiance to, and the man she loves as a father. 


I've read all the books in this series to my husband. Another stellar offering. I love the characters, and my heart goes out to them. Boy, what can I say? Sometimes authors are just mean to their characters!



Series Synopsis:
On a foolhardy foray into a foreign realm, Taran Elijah is attacked by a terrible weapon known as the Staff. Killing its wielder, he escapes into Albia, inadvertantly carrying the Staff.

Concerned by the vicious raids that follow Taran's actions, Major Sullyan of the High King's forces crosses into Andaryon to seek diplomatic resolution to the crisis. She is captured and tortured by Lord Rykan, aspirant to the Andaryon throne.

Slowly dying, Sullyan escapes his clutches. She offers her skills to the Hierarch in defense of his throne, finally confronting Rykan on the field of battle. Her handsome Captain and lover, Robin Tamsen, embarks on a desperate quest to recover the Staff. But Rykan's greedy General, Sonten, is two steps ahead of him.

If Robin cannot lay hold of the weapon before Sonten does, Sullyan's life and the lives of all Artesans are forfeit.

The race for the Staff has begun.


Cas Peace was born in Hampshire UK, in 1957, and has lived there most of her life. Her first career was as a horse-riding instructor, and horses remain very close to her heart. She then spent 13 years working for the British Civil Service before leaving the UK to live in Italy for three years, 1991-1994. She speaks passable but by no means perfect Italian, and loves to return to Italy whenever she can.  Cas's other great loves are anything to do with animals, especially dogs and horses, (she supports many animal charities) and also singing.  Cas loves folk songs and along with her husband, who plays guitar, has performed in many a Southern England folk club. Sometimes they even asked her back! She writes folk songs to accompany her fantasy novels, and offers them as free downloads from her website.

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Wednesday, April 23, 2014

Cover Reveal - The Challenge by Cas Peace


Freaking excited here! I interrupt this usually silent Wednesday to share the awesome Cas Peace's next cover in her Artesans of Albia series. Anyone who's followed my blog for a while know that hubby and I are huge fans of these books.
You can see my reviews herehere, and here.

The Artesans of Albia is an epic, triple-trilogy fantasy saga.
  • Trilogy 1 -Artesans of Albia. 
  • Trilogy 2 - Circle of Conspiracy. 
  • Trilogy 3 - Master of Malice.
The Challenge begins the second trilogy. To celebrate, there's a giveaway!

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Friday, December 13, 2013

Thrills and Epic Fantasy - Two Spolights

The first book I'd like to spotlight today is S.M. Anderson's Copied. Check it out:

Adopted off the black market, Alexander Mitchell, has no idea his DNA is copyrighted and property of military weapons giant Texacom Defense. Nor that his DNA is being used to develop an army of clones. 

When the company discovers he was not properly disposed of 17 years ago, they send an assassin copy, BETA23, to terminate Xan and cover it up After he narrowly escapes BETA23’s first attempt, Xan teams up with Lacey, a genetically engineered genius he’s surprised to find common ground with— only they’re awkward together. Half of the time she stares at Xan like the science project he is and the other half…let’s just say Xan can’t keep his eyes off her lips.

When they manage to capture a company copy by luck and sheer stupidity on Xan’s part, Lacey is determined to see the good in their prisoner to the point she believes BETA23 can be persuaded to give them the intelligence they need to keep the company forever off Xan’s back. Xan’s not sure if he can trust the darker version of himself, not when it means gambling with the lives of his family and the possibility of losing Lacey.



S. M. Anderson (Sarah Anderson) was born in Lima, Peru. She has lived in seven different countries, on five continents, and speaks a smattering of languages. As a child and even young adult, writing and reading were difficult for her, so difficult that she received extra help outside the classroom and was diagnosed with a learning disability. However, she always loved stories, especially ethnic folktales from the countries she lived in. It was the desire to create stories of her own that fueled her determination to overcome the challenges that came with writing. She has a BA in Art Education from BYU, with a minor in Russian, and a love of power tools. She has a growing family of three kids and currently lives in Springville, Utah.



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The other spotlight is on a series--Artesans of Albia. Hubby and I are huge fans. It's one that I read aloud to him, and he will frequently nag me that I need to finish whatever I'm doing so we can read again.

On a foolhardy foray into a foreign realm, Taran Elijah is attacked by a terrible weapon known as the Staff. Killing its wielder, he escapes into Albia, inadvertantly carrying the Staff.

Concerned by the vicious raids that follow Taran's actions, Major Sullyan of the High King's forces crosses into Andaryon to seek diplomatic resolution to the crisis. She is captured and tortured by Lord Rykan, aspirant to the Andaryon throne. 

Slowly dying, Sullyan escapes his clutches. She offers her skills to the Hierarch in defense of his throne, finally confronting Rykan on the field of battle.

Her handsome Captain and lover, Robin Tamsen, embarks on a desperate quest to recover the Staff. But Rykan's greedy General, Sonten, is two steps ahead of him. If Robin cannot lay hold of the weapon before Sonten does, Sullyan's life and the lives of all Artesans are forfeit.

The race for the Staff has begun.



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And don't forget my Give Books for Christmas giveway. The deadline is December 15th.

Wednesday, August 21, 2013

Author Interviews - Mine and Cas Peace, Author of King's Artesan

First off, don't forget about the A Change of Plans audiobook giveaway going on this week. As part of the tour, I'm being interviewed today at Taffy Lovell's blog, where you can sign up on the rafflecopter for a chance to win!

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I have a special guest today, my friend and sister in writing, Cas Peace. She's the author of the wonderful Artesans of Albia fantasy series. I love these books. This is one of those that I read to my husband. We're reading King's Artesan right now, and you should have heard him yesterday: "Can we read some more?" Seriously. These books are that good!

Cas is here today to celebrate the launch of King's Artesan and has agreed to do an interview. Take it away Cas!

First I would like to thank Donna for inviting me on to her blog. I loved these questions, Donna – I hope you enjoy the replies!

What do you think about when you're alone in your car?
This is a question I’ve never been asked before, and I’ve never given it much thought before, either. But now that you’ve asked it, I realize how relevant it is to my writing. I don’t do it much now because I don’t have to drive to work, but when I was commuting to my Civil Service job years ago, I used to pass the boredom of being stuck in traffic by acting out little scenes in my head. These would usually center round TV programs I’d seen. I would become a character in the program, or make up a new one, and have fun imagining what the regular characters would say, or how we would react to each other. Generally, I ended up saving one or more of them from some dreadful fate, or from being murdered, by doing something clever. It was fun. This playing with TV characters was also the way my entire Artesans series came about!

What songs best describe your writing philosophy?
Because of the way my books came about (i.e. - with no conscious thought or planning from me!) I guess Leaving On A Jet Plane by John Denver is the song that just about sums it up. All the ideas and plots for my entire Artesan series came at me so fast, it was as if they were rocket-driven. And the experience of writing them out once I got started was the equivalent of being bundled onto a plane and having it take off like a rocket beneath me, with me having no idea whatsoever where I was going or where I’d end up. And I’m still not sure!

Pick two celebrities to be your parents and explain why they are your choices.
I’m not really sure I’d want a celebrity for a parent - they never seem to stay married for long! But I know what you mean ….

Ok. For a dad I’m going to pick Nelson Mandela. He just seems like a really, really nice guy. Anyone who can survive what he has and still forgive those who did it to him has to have superb strength of character. And I so admire people who put themselves in the way of harm for the good of others. And for a mum (or mom, as my American friends spell it!) I’m going to choose Joy Adamson, the woman who helped raise Elsa the lioness in Born Free, and then returned her to the wild. Nature conservation and respect for wildlife are two ideals very close to my heart. I’d have loved the opportunity to meet Joy, and I think she was probably a very feisty person. We need more like her in this world! 

I know you love horses. What's your history there? Did you grow up around them or did that come later?
I have no idea where my love of horses came from – I was born with it, I think. My aunt rides horses, or did when she was younger, but no one else in my family has ever been connected with them or interested in them. We weren’t wealthy enough for me to have a pony when I was a kid, but there was a riding school close by that I went to. I say “riding school”, but really it was a woman who kept a few horses on a local naval base, and she gave rides and “lessons” to kids from naval families. My dad was in the Fleet Air Arm rather than the Navy, but it was close enough for me to get accepted. I loved it, but the “lessons” weren’t very good. I fell off more than I stayed on. When I was about 16, I saved up enough to have some proper lessons, and when I left school, I went to train at a recognized center for Equitation and got my teaching qualification. It was hard work, but I loved it. Unfortunately, it paid very little, and eventually I had to get a different job that paid decent wages. It was only then that I was able to afford a horse of my own, although I don’t have one now.

What was your inspiration for the world and the magic system in your Artesans of Albia series?
I have always been fascinated by the natural world. My dad grew up in the countryside, and when I visited my grandparents, my granddad would take me on long, country walks. Animals and birds delighted me, and I soaked up everything I could learn about them. As I grew older, I also developed a keen interest in places like Stonehenge, ancestral sites with an air of mystery and majesty about them. I l also love forests and the deep, sacrosanct feeling of being among ancient trees. I began reading books about Druids, and the ancient Celts, and felt an emotional connection to their brand of spirituality. I have always suspected there is an ancient force buried deep in our Earth, one that our long-ago forebears knew how to tap into. So it was a natural progression to explore this force through my writing. Artesans are attuned to this force and can use it if they learn how to channel and respect it. 

The setting for my world is a variant of medieval England. While I appreciate the hypocrisy and irony of my making use of technology, something within me hankers after a simpler, pre-Industrial Revolution life. I’m sure I wouldn’t like it if I had one – there are too many modern conveniences I would miss! – and so it is merely romance on my part. But I can live in it vicariously, through my writing.  

I understand there's supposed to be nine books in the series, essentially three trilogies, right? What's next?
Yes, there are three trilogies to my series. Artesans of Albia is the first trilogy, Circle of Conspiracy is the second, and Master of Malice, the third. Currently, I am working on a YA prequel to the series, called Maiden of Mysteries. This will concentrate on Sullyan’s childhood and then her struggles to be accepted at the Manor. It will also cover her early relationship with Robin, and some other stuff only hinted at in the other books. After that – who knows? There are five realms in my world, and I’ve not even begun to explore three of its races. A Sinnian makes a fairly brief but vital appearance during Circle and Malice, but Roamerlings and Relkorians don’t feature much at all. Plenty of book material there! Or maybe I’ll write something completely different. That might be fun! 

Oooo...I can't wait! Did I mention I'm a big fan of this series?

Well, to celebrate the book's release, there's a giveaway. Well, actually three! How cool is that?

Unable to purge herself of the poison that is slowly killing her, Major Sullyan remains trapped in Andaryon. The only thing that can save her is the Staff, which still lies buried in Taran’s cellar.

Robin Tamsen sets out on a desperate quest to recover the artifact, but the enemy is two steps ahead of him. Sonten knows where the Staff is, and he will stop at nothing to get it back. If he does, Sullyan’s life will be forfeit and no Artesan will be safe.

The race for the Staff has begun.


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About Cas
As well as her love of horses, Cas is mad about dogs, especially Lurchers. She enjoys dog agility training and currently owns two rescue Lurchers, Milly and Milo. Milly has already had some success in the agility ring, and Milo will begin competing in late 2011.

Cas loves country walks, working in stained glass and folk singing. She has also written a nonfiction book, "For the Love of Daisy," which tells the life story of her beautiful Dalmatian.

Wednesday, June 19, 2013

Cover Reveal - King's Artesan by Cas Peace

I'm still on blog vacation but I have something special today.
I've been looking forward to this book since I finished reading the second in the series--King's Champion--to my husband. We both love these books!


Available August 2013

The race for the Staff has begun.

Rykan’s Staff is vital to Sullyan’s survival. In order to retrieve it, Robin Tamsen must cross the Veils into Albia and go to Taran’s village. He arrives too late. 

Intent on reviving his own plans for conquest, Sonten forces Taran to reveal the Staff’s location. Outwitting Robin, he besieges the village of Hyecombe and takes possession of the Staff.

If Robin cannot stop Sonten taking the weapon back to Andaryon, Sullyan’s life and the lives of every Artesan are forfeit. Yet it is not just Sonten he must battle, but also one of his own. And the mysterious Albian Baron hasn’t abandoned his plans, either…
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Cas Peace was born in Hampshire UK, in 1957, and has lived there most of her life. Her first career was as a horse-riding instructor, and horses remain very close to her heart. She then spent 13 years working for the British Civil Service before leaving the UK to live in Italy for three years, 1991-1994. She speaks passable but by no means perfect Italian, and loves to return to Italy whenever she can. 
Cas's other great loves are anything to do with animals, especially dogs and horses, (she supports many animal charities) and also singing. Cas loves folk songs and along with her husband, who plays guitar, has performed in many a Southern England folk club. Sometimes they even asked her back! She writes folk songs to accompany her fantasy novels, and offers them as free downloads from her website.
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Wednesday, June 20, 2012

Got Stories Writing Conference

Last Saturday, I attended a conference put on by Rhemalda Publishing. There were a number of presenters who are published with Rhemalda, some were local while others were from other parts of the world. Here are a few of some of my notes.

J.S. Chancellor
Character Development

She recommended a book by Jessica Morrell called Between the Lines

J.S. said to be subtle and not put exaggerated traits on characters. It's easy to show a jerk of a husband being overtly insensitive to his wife, for example, when she's going through a difficult time. It's more subtle if, while she's crying, what he notices is how tacky her shoes are.

She suggested that we writers should know things about our characters that we'd never put in the book, especially our villains. "Even Hitler opened the door for someone." So the color of a childhood bedroom or a favorite song as a teen can provide a dimension we could miss as we're crafting that character's behavior. J.S. said it's more than knowing who the characters are now but who they were in the past are now but what they were in their past. We are the sum total of a million little things in our life.

Don't underestimate the power of what a character doesn't say.

T.J. Robinson
Five Keys to Getting Started

1.  T.J. started out by reminding everyone that no two authors are the same and all must find what works fro them. He suggested that the best way to pick your target audience is to try some short, sample pieces.

2.  He uses something he calls the Query Letter Master. He write his query before he writes the book, using it as a kind of outline for the story.

3. Push through when you want to quit. You may need to take a break from your writing, brainstorm with people, or try writing something completely different.

4. It's hard work to turn a great idea into a great book. Start simple and build on it.

5. Enjoy the ride. Don't let the inevitable rejection get you down.

Cas Peace
Designing a Fantasy World
(Sidenote: Cas and I met on Facebook when I did a giveaway last year of her book King's Envoy. She's from the U.K., so it was really fun to get to meet her in person.)

Cas noted that we are immersed in place. The physical properties in your world impact everything. Example: Is your world going to be round or flat? If it's flat, is it flat horizontally or vertically? How would the geography of your world impact the peoples and societies in it. The geography of your world can be a character, too. 

She posed a number of questions you ought to ask yourself as you create your world. Will it be similar to ours? If not, how will it be different? Are there continents? Are they static or move around? Is here plenty of water or is water rare? How are the seasons different? What is the weather like? How many seasons are there?When it rains, is it liquid that falls? Is there a single sun? Single moon? How do those impact the seasons and the weather? The tides?

If you can create a vivid and fascinating world, readers may ignore inconsistencies.

Cas raised an interesting question about religion on your world, noting religion is not always about "gods". People worship many different things. She gave an example of soccer, saying that many people in the U.K. worship soccer. Then she noted that all  societies curse. If there's no religion, what do they curse?

In world building, we need to consider things like technology and how it relates to travel, war. This made me think of the U.S. space program and how we have all kinds of everyday things that were originally created for astronauts: freeze dried foods and CT scans are just two examples that come into mind.

If your world has magic, it must be essential to your world and your people so neither can function without it. Magic must have limits or flaws--there must be a price for using it.

The small things make all the difference. Make it real, at least in reference (like potty breaks, though you don't have to belabor them). This made me remember a Star Trek book written about the classic series by they guy that did the Trouble With Tribbles episode. He suggested that since bathrooms are never shown on Klingon ships, that explains why they're so cranky.

Michelle Davidson Argyle

Writers Etiquette

Michelle reminded us to be positive--even when dealing with things like negative reviews. When you put your work out there it's no longer yours.

People remember a smiling face, good attitude, and positive words. Remember that people are very busy and may inadvertently come across as brusque. People pick up on insincerity. So be sincere but don't bring other people down.

When introducing yourself (in email or in person), mention how you know the person (read their book, met at a conference, etc.) Pay attention to body posture and be sensitive to what it tells you (arms crossed over chest can be a sign that the person isn't feeling particularly approachable).

Once you're published, you are tied to a publisher, so you need to be professional.

Those are a few of the speakers at the conference. It was fun to see some familiar faces in the audience, too.

And speaking of conferences, for anybody in my area, don't forget that next month iWriteNetwork is hosting a two-day conference with the Alpine School District.

The District's sponsorship makes it a very affordable conference. We'll have access to two computer labs. You even have the option of signing up for just one of the two days. You can register here.

You can check the iWriteNetwork blog for details on the schedule, if you're able to attend.

Do you have a writing conference in your summer plans?
If so, which one(s)?

Wednesday, December 14, 2011

Book Review - Mistborn: The Alloy of Law

Brandon Sanderson's done it again. And that's why he's become one of my favorite authors. You can find an article on the Tor blog here where Brandon wonders if his 14-year-old self would approve of what he did in this fantasy book.

Well, I loved what he did.

Here's a synopsis:

Three hundred years after the events of the Mistborn trilogy, Scadrial is on the verge of modernity, with railroads to supplement the canals, electric lighting in the streets and the homes of the wealthy, and the first steel-framed skyscrapers racing for the clouds.

Kelsier, Vin, Elend, Sazed, Spook, and the rest are now part of history—or religion. Yet even as science and technology are reaching new heights, the old magics of Allomancy and Feruchemy continue to play a role in this reborn world. Out in the frontier lands known as the Roughs, they are crucial tools for the brave men and women attempting to establish order and justice.

One such is Waxillium Ladrian, a rare Twinborn who can Push on metals with his Allomancy and use Feruchemy to become lighter or heavier at will. After twenty years in the Roughs, Wax has been forced by family tragedy to return to the metropolis of Elendel. Now he must reluctantly put away his guns and assume the duties and dignity incumbent upon the head of a noble house. Or so he thinks, until he learns the hard way that the mansions and elegant tree-lined streets of the city can be even more dangerous than the dusty plains of the Roughs.


I'm good with some fight scenes in books. If they drag on too long I find myself getting bored and will skim ahead to see what the outcome is. What's surprising is how much I enjoyed the Mistborn trilogy's fight scenes using the unique magics of the world, both for the Allomancers (people who can "burn" metals and get power from it) and the Feruchemists (people who can store things like health, weight, strength, etc. into "metalminds" on their bodies).

I love what Sanderson's done in this new society where the main character can do both Allomancy and Feruchemy. Oh, my, the things he can do with it. In Brandon's article above, he spoke about the introduction of guns into this world. Adding this element to the already clever and exciting fight was brilliant. I grew up in a day when westerns were big on TV and in the movies. I remember Clint Eastwood before he became famous in the Spaghetti Westerns like The Good, The Bad, and The Ugly back when he was on Rawhide. The feel that Sanderson brought to the book matched well with my memories but, as always, with his own fascinating twist.

Brandon did a great job blending of our turn-of-the-century-type (the one before) technology with trains, horseless carriages, skyscrapers into the culture and political system we were familiar with in the earlier series. I loved what he's done with the place, so to speak.

And the characters. Brandon writes characters I love. I love their flaws (oh, my gosh, Wayne just makes me smile!), their strengths, their humor, and their interactions with each other. In the character Waxillium, you've got a brilliant mind mixed with amazing physical skills all set inside a man who's dealing with a terrible emotional burden. A man with a powerful sense of justice and a need to do something to make things better. Kind of a "saving people thing" that Harry Potter had--only Wax is no kid.

I'm glad this is the start of a new series. As always, Sanderson throws in some great twists that will keep you on your toes. I highly recommend this book.

Tomorrow is the last chance to enter to win The King's Envoy in The Give Books for Christmas Giveaway Hop. 
Click here to sign up. I'm choosing the winner at noon.


Also tomorrow, you  might want to stop over at Matt's place at The Quintessentially Questionable Query Experiment. He's going to post my query and critique it on Friday.

Sunday, December 11, 2011

What's With That?

The Give Books for Christmas Giveaway Hop is still going on. 
Click here to remember the details.

Have you seen this article in the Huffington Post about Amazon's new Kindle Direct Publishing (KDP)? It's been getting a lot of talk among folks in my writing organizations.

The implications are huge.Whether you've ever considered self-publishing or not, this is something to watch.

Is this a good thing for publishing? What do you think?

Friday, December 9, 2011

Grammar Friday - Capitalization (Plus Other Stuff)

Capitalization at a Glance

Source
Days of the week: Monday, Tuesday

Months: May, June

Holidays, holy days:
Christmas, Easter

Periods, events in history: Renaissance, Middle Ages

Special Events: Battle of Gettysburg
( Gettysburg? A special event? Seems like an understatement to me)

Official Documents: Constitution

Trade Names : Kleenex tissues, Honda Pilot
(Gotta pay attention to these in your writing. Like Jeep vs a jeep.

Formal epithets: Attila the Hun

Geographical names
Planets, heavenly bodies: Mars, Pluto, the Milky Way

Continents: Australia, Africa

Streets, roads, highways: Fifth Avenue, Route 66

Sections of a country, of a continent: the Northwest, the Far East

Landforms: Mohave Desert, Blue Ridge Mountains

Bodies of water: Lake Powell, Amazon River

Public areas: Yellow Stone National Park

Things you don't capitalize: 
Seasons, a.m. or p.m., or compass points.

Give Books for Christmas Giveaway Hop 
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WIP Update

I sent the first 50 pages of WIP #1 to an editor.
Should I squeee? Or should I cringe?






































Monday, December 5, 2011

Fine--You Win, Kings, and Hallelujah


 Don't forget you can sign up painlessly to participate in the Give Books Blog Hop and get a book for Christmas (or other applicable gift-giving celebration this time of year). The Hop runs through December 15th, but I'll be cutting it off at noon that day so I have time to contact the winner. I'm supposed to get the book in the mail on the 16th. Click here for details and check out the others books you could win by visiting the following blogs.


Give Books for Christmas Giveaway Hop
1. Inksplasher (US)  7. Maria Hoagland (US)  13. Jennifer K. Clark (US)  
2. Jennifer Hurst (INT)  8. The Last Word (US)  14. Publish Novels or Bust (US)  
3. FALL (INT)  9. Tristi Pinkston  15. Heidi Murphy (US)  
4. Geek Girl (INT)  10. LDS Publisher (INT)  16. Nichole Giles  
5. Heart on a Chain (INT)  11. Carolyn Frank (INT)  

6. Immortal Mine (INT)  12. K.C. Grant Writer's Corner (US)  

Since many of us are recovering from NaNo, and now we're in the throes of one of the busiest times of the year, here's a little something to lighten your mood. These kids just make me smile.



Have you got your shopping done?

Sunday, December 4, 2011

Should I or Shouldn't I?

Don't forget you can sign up painlessly to participate in the Give Books Blog Hop and get a book for Christmas (or other applicable gift-giving celebration this time of year). The Hop runs through December 15th, and I'll be getting the book out on the 16th. Click here for details and check out the others books you could win by visiting the following blogs.

Give Books for Christmas Giveaway Hop
1. Inksplasher (US)  7. Maria Hoagland (US)  13. K.C. Grant Writer's Corner (US)  
2. Jennifer Hurst (INT)  8. The Last Word (US)  14. Jennifer K. Clark (US)  
3. FALL (INT)  9. Weaving a Tale or Two (US)  15. Publish Novels or Bust (US)  
4. Geek Girl (INT)  10. Tristi Pinkston  16. Heidi Murphy (US)  
5. Heart on a Chain (INT)  11. LDS Publisher (INT)  

6. Immortal Mine (INT)  12. Carolyn Frank (INT)  

 
*sigh*

Yes, that's a really big sigh.

My goal this month is to finish the edit for WIP #1 and send the first fifty pages off to an editor. AND I need to finish my query. Well, it's finished. The dang thing's just not right yet. ETA for clarification: This query has been critiqued by both my online and in-person critique groups. It's been critiqued by some other writerly friends and in its essential form given a thumbs up from the author I won the query critique from. But everyone--and I mean every who hasn't read the book--thinks a critical thing referenced in the query (and which is the hook) is a major plot-line. But it's really just a catalyst and sets into motion what happens in the rest of the book.

I've thought of submitting to Matt over at The Quintessentially Questionable Query Experiment, and he said he'd be willing to look at it. Alex and Nancy have both said I should.

I just have this little problem about bearing myself in public, so to speak, and subjecting myself to ridicule. I'm good at my day job, and I work very hard to make sure I'm knowledgeable and up to date with my skills. I have to be because if I screw up I can get sued. Don't even mess with someone's bid to public office, believe me.

But I think the thing that really turns me into a quivering mess is the genre bias I talked about in this post. I'm not worried about Matt's comments. He a consummate professional and tactful besides. When I had one of my sons who's got a bright, creative mind (I love to bounce ideas off him) read an earlier version, his tone dripped with sarcastic cheese.

So, my adventure romance book's query could be said to have a melodramatic tone. If you read it the way my son did. Writing is so subjective I'm sure people will pick up on the cheese factor. And I'm so not into this:


Please note that my son made fun of the version approved by the author I won a query critique from.

It could just be him. Or it could be that the tone is there but fits the genre. The bottom line is that I'm at my wit's end over this thing. So I'm going to let you folks help me decide. On the right sidebar is a poll. Please comment here and tell me why you voted the way you did.

In the meantime, I'm going to be doing this:

Friday, December 2, 2011

Grammar Friday - Emphasis & Give Books Blog Hop

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Emphasis

Following are three sentences using commas, parentheses, or em-dashes to set off a portion of the sentence.
The supporters of the trade bill need the votes of three or more senators, the most likely ones to be won over are Smith, Jones, and White, if they are to get approval of the legislation.

The supporters of the trade bill need the votes of three or more senators (the most likely ones to be won over are Smith, Jones, and White) if they are to get approval of the legislation.

The supporters of the trade bill need the votes of three or more senators—the most likely ones to be won over are Smith, Jones, and White—if they are to get approval of the legislation.
Which is correct?

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They're all grammatically correct. As to which you should use depends upon your intent for the sentence and what you want to emphasize in it.

If you don't want to draw attention to the aside, commas would be a good option. Using the parentheses draws a little more attention.

Visually, if you really want to draw the reader's attention to the aside, you'd use the em dash because it really makes it stand out.

Bonus Question

And for that matter, what is an en dash or an em dash? Well, and en dash is basically the width of an "n" and and em dash is the width of an "m". Isn't it nice to know there really is some logic in all this? If you're interested in some nice examples of when and how to use dashes, there's a nice article here.

I have to confess that I interrupt myself all the time with asides, so they have a tendency to want to take over in my writing. Do you use dashes? Or are you a dash hater?
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